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JOHN TURNER

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from my photo,10X12in on canvas board,alkydoils

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Hi Alan and Robert ! Any comments on "reflections"? Regards John T.

Alan Bickley

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I can see a couple of possible improvements that may help John, I’ll try and come back to this some time tomorrow. Interesting subject...

JOHN TURNER

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Thanks Alan.
With Sarah, Phil, Ellen, Rose the dentist, and the granddaughter whose name I forget.

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John - I'm suffering a bit at the moment: had a bad fall just over a week ago, landed on a knee, and have done something 'orrid to the calf muscle.  So my mind isn't entirely on my work just now!  It's very painful. I'll let Alan have a go first, then if I've anything to add, will pile in.  You've chosen quite a difficult subject here, and while there are things I can see which I think could be improved, it needs a bit of thinking about.  Ripples in water are difficult - I think you've made a good stab at them, but .... well, I'll yield first place to Alan!  Rather than do what I said I wasn't going to do and comment immediately.   What, by the way, did you use for your black?  

JOHN TURNER

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Hi Robert, Sorry to hear about your accident. My black was burnt sienna and ultramarine blue.
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Robert Jones, NAPA

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Good choice.   On the whole, my advice to you is keep doing what you're doing - in time, though - I think you'd do better to choose artists' quality paints: you can build them up on an alkyd base, if you like: you'll get brighter, stronger colours if you do. But I like your painting - I'd like it better with stronger colours, and stronger contrasts - but while I nurse my painful calf,  I think Alan will be able to offer you more.  I'm finding it hard to even think straight right now!

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JOHN TURNER

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Many thanks Robert.

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Well Robert has got it right here, my initial thoughts were contrast and colour! Saying that, it’s not a mile away. You’ve got some good dark areas to the top left, these could be slightly darker and would be your darkest values - then the lighter area centre right needs to be lighter, this would be your lightest tonal value. These minor changes will help to create greater tonal contrast, an important part of any painting. A glaze of warmer colour over the water would help, remember that ripples (in general) create ellipses on water, these aren’t too bad. However, these ripples look a bit bold and high, and are to some extent competing with the geese’ which are pretty good. Some smaller directional brush strokes on the water would add interest, (particularly in the foreground area) keeping them in tandem with the elliptical shapes that are created in the water. Also some highlights within the ripples, but don’t overdo these, just a few as they could be distracting to the eye. I could probably go on, but have a look at these small suggestions, but generally, it’s a good painting as it stands.

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Hi Alan, many thanks for your full and detailed crit - very useful and encouraging! Regards John T.

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You’re welcome John, I’m sure Robert will be able to add something also.
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